Narrative writing

We are learning to write a narrative.

Our picture inspiration:

(Ball. M. (2005).  Footrot Flats: Sports Edition.  pp 129.)

The World Cup

Once there lived two rugby players called Mitchel and

Jack. Jack was the strongest at rugby. Mitchell was the fastest at rugby. They played at Ohaeawai rugby club. Jack was a fat wide man, Mitchell was a skinny tall man.

One day Mitchell and Jack played for the All Blacks. They were playing against England. The All Blacks star Jack ran and bowled England over and scored a try. Next Mitchell stepped England and he scored a try too. Then England got the ball and nearly scored a try but Mitchell and Jack saved the try.

Finally they scored a two man try and they got the World Cup and that was the end of the rugby.

By Mitchel

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Playing Rugby

Once there lived two boys called Cole and Rick who liked to go to the ruby field to play rugby. Cole was skinny and white. Rick was fat and brown. They both wore black gumboots when they played rugby.  

One Sunday morning at the rugby game, the people were cheering for Cole and Rick’s teams. Cole scored five tries and Rick scored seven tries. Cole’s team lost the first half. Rick’s team lost the second half and the score was even.

At the end with a minute to play. Cole kicked the ball into the air. Coles gumboot landed into Rick's face then he landed into a big pile of cow poo. It went slop then Cole said to Rick, “are you alright?”

By Reagan

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Stinky Boys

Once there were two little boy’s, their names were Lukas and Finn. They played at Ohaeawai rugby club. Lukas was fat and as tall as a tree. He was very good at kicking rugby balls. Fin was skinny, they were both very, very stinky. They had a black and white dog, his name was Max. He liked to roll in cow poo.

One day at rugby it started pouring with rain.They did not have any towels. So they got drenched with rain. They like to be stinky but the stinky was gone. They did not like it at all. They ran to the trash and they got as stingy as possible.

All the other people ran away blocking their noses. But Lukas and Fin were so excited and happy.

By Brooke

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Playing rugby

Once two little boy’s were playing rugby in Ohaeawai. They were called Max and Ben. Max was the smart one and Ben was the hairy one. Ben did not know how to play rugby at all so Max trained Ben. “Oh no!”yelled Max. “There is cow poop behind you!” Flop! Ben slipped in the poo.

“I told you!” laughed Max. “Hahaha. You slipped in cow poo!”

“I’m going home.’’ Shouted Ben.

By AnneLise

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Pink Shirt Day

Today was Pink Shirt day for Bullying awareness. These children planned and made their own video about bullying. Well done boys and their camera person Leonor.

Writing

We have been learning to add powerful verbs and adjectives to our writing to make it shine. Here are some gems from this week. 

The Climb

I was so tired I could hardly move. I spotted the trees swishing in the air back and forth. When I got to the top of the mountain I was exhausted. I heard birds chirping it sounded wonderful. The fresh green grass was as soft as a pillow. The mountain was bumpy like a hippopotamus back. I fell on the soft fresh green grass. We listened to uncle Hone tell us Maori stories. Then I ate my lunch yummy lunch.

By Denym
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Wow! I ran up the hill a little bit. I found a cow horn, I put it in my bag. I kept on walking up the hill. There was a brown gate I climbed over the gate. It is a long way, I said to myself. Then there was another gate, then another gate, one more then we were there. Next we were so high up I could almost see the whole world. From here it was a long way down. We walked up the last bit of the mountain.

By Charlie.

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“WOW!” That is the biggest rocky mountain I have even seen in my life. Bang bang! I hopped off the rusty old bus. We lined up like clever dogs standing up. After that we started to climb. Heave ho! I climbed the green pathway. It got steeper every minute. Louisa and Sara had to hold onto my hand. Finally we reached the tippy top of the mountain. When we got to the top of the rocky mountain it had lush green grass. l could see the other children and the black and white cows. “Wow!” I could see the glistening blue water in the lake. After that we raced down the rocky mountain like cheetahs chasing mice.     

By Ronan                 

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The bus sped across the bumpy metal road. When the bus stopped at the green grassy mountain Sam and I raced up the high mountain. Sam and I saw the little kids and we saw the teachers too.

By Sunita

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Wow! The bus screeched to a stop it was dusty on the gravel. When we got to the steep mountain we walked up the mountain. There were black cows and white and brown cows. I puffed up the hill, it was like an adventure. It was bendy, it made me feel dry so I had a drink then we kept walking.

By Reagan